As you search the broken wreckage of my Soul
You find the letters I once would hold
Of Love, that we once would share
When I only wanted you to be there.
As you cry your tears of sorrow
Please think of yesterday
As well as tomorrow
Although our time together was short-lived
All of my love, was yours to give.
Through cold Winters
And Summer nights
As we made love under the starry skies
Our love bloomed, we thought was here to stay
But the Hand of Fate stepped in
And cruelly took it all away.
Please don't doubt me
Was my Love always True?
Sweet love of mine
There was only you!
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That was really lovely. It was simple, it was so unique and I felt like you really captured something. Your poem played out like a movie to me, I can clearly see the love and the pain that you wrote about. Keep up the great work! :)
Very nice and moving. I would maybe add more effects on the loss.
As I lay motionless on an empty bed,
I think of all the tears I have shed,
our past may be cast to sea,
but its you I love, your my energy. (Something along those lines)
Just an idea
a beautifully sad poem ,one could see the wife's eyes welling up as she read and the husband speaking these final words.Very nicely done
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